Risen — Poem analysis

Dave BontaContemplative

The sun slips over the gray pelt of a vole zipping from one hole to another

and catches on a distant gleam of frost-heaved flotsam, luring me to go look.

A beer bottle at the base of a tree rests in a cradle of leaves, bluer than the sky.

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Nothing much happens in "Risen," and that is the point. The sun moves across a field, a small animal darts between holes, and the speaker walks over to look at a bottle. In twelve short lines, Dave Bonta turns this scrap of morning into a quiet revelation: beauty doesn't wait for worthy subjects, and it often reaches us by accident, as a glint at the edge of attention.

For the first two stanzas the sun is the only real actor, and its verbs are physical. It "slips over" the vole's "gray pelt," which makes light sound liquid and a little stealthy, something that moves unnoticed. Then it "catches on" a distant gleam, like a thread snagging on a nail. The speaker has no say in what follows. The gleam is "luring me to go look," and "luring" is a word from fishing and hunting. The person who seems to be watching the scene turns out to be the one who gets hooked.

The poem has no rhyme and no regular meter. It is free verse in three tercets, with short, uneven lines. The sound is still carefully shaped. The vole is "zipping," a word with a quick z and a short i, and it hangs at the end of its line. The next line, "from one hole to another," runs on in a small scurry, its long o and the echo of "one" and "another" suggesting an animal shuttling back and forth. In the second stanza the hard f of "frost-heaved flotsam" gives way to the soft l's of "luring" and "look," as if the speaker's resistance dissolves. In the last stanza the lines lengthen. "A beer bottle at the base of a tree" is the longest line in the poem, and its b's land with a thud. The poem seems to settle where the bottle settles.

The key words carry more than they first seem to. "Flotsam" normally means debris floating on water. Using it for something pushed up by frost turns the ground into a sea and the bottle into something washed ashore. "Frost-heaved" also suggests, though the poem never says it, that this is a cold season, and the ground itself is pushing things upward. That connects to the title. "Risen" can mean the sun, now up, and the objects the frost has lifted. It may also carry a faint echo of resurrection. The bottle lies in "a cradle of leaves," and "cradle" is a tender, almost birth-like word for something that someone threw away. A discarded object is being quietly brought back to life by light. I read that religious echo as a suggestion, not a claim, because the poem never states it.

The final line, "bluer than the sky," is the poem's one extravagant move. Everywhere else the language is plain and exact. Here it makes a comparison that cannot literally be true, since the sky is our standard for blue. It is true as an experience, though. Glass struck by low sunlight can look more intensely colored than the open air around it. The speaker has been led across the field by that intensity, and the poem ends on it without comment.

What the poem leaves out matters too. The speaker disappears from the last stanza, so the bottle simply is, with no "I" standing between it and the reader. The poem doesn't scold anyone for litter, and it doesn't pretend the bottle is anything but a bottle. It sets the vole, the sun, the frost and the cast-off glass on one level and lets each have its moment of being seen. It has the compression of a haiku, though it doesn't follow that form's counting of syllables.

That restraint is what makes the poem worth reading. It is about attention: how a small movement or glint can pull us out of our path, and how much we notice when we follow it. The poem ends at the bottle and asks us to think about what it means to find something lovely in what someone else left behind.

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