Risk assessment — Poem analysis

Dave BontaContemplative

the rich fear too great a liberty hands singing in the fields

without calling God to make a new ground

without the price of order bound up in a book

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A risk assessment is the sort of document nobody reads for pleasure. It is cold and procedural, written to protect whoever commissioned it. Dave Bonta borrows that bureaucratic title for six unpunctuated lines, and the borrowing is the poem's first move. Everything that follows is a risk assessment in which the reader is invited to question whose risk it is and who is doing the measuring.

The only real verb in the poem comes in the opening line: "the rich fear too great a liberty." The phrase is slippery. "Too great a liberty" is the language of judgment, and it also echoes the idiom of "taking liberties," as if freedom were bad manners. The poem never says the liberty is too great, only that the rich think so. The next line gives the image that alarms them: "hands singing in the fields." Calling people "hands" is the old vocabulary of the farm and factory, where workers are counted by the part of the body that is useful. Bonta lets those hands do something no employer ordered. They sing, and the song joins labor and pleasure in a single gesture. Nobody is giving orders and nobody seems to be listening for them. The image is gentle, and the gentleness is what makes the fear look odd.

The poem then turns to two clauses that begin with "without," and these tell us what the rich are really afraid of. The first is "without calling God / to make a new ground." The hands do not ask divine permission before building a new world. "Calling" carries a double meaning, since it can mean summoning and it can mean vocation, the sense of being assigned your place. "Ground" works on several levels too. It can be farmland, a foundation, or the grounds on which an argument stands. The hard "g" sounds in "great," "God" and "ground" link the fear, the authority and the new world together. Judging by the imagery, the poem suggests that the powerful have always needed heaven to sign off on the arrangement of the earth, and that a community making its own ground makes that sign-off unnecessary.

The last couplet turns to cost: "without the price of order / bound up in a book." Here the poem borrows the language of accounting. Order has a price, and the word suggests that someone always pays it. The "book" is deliberately unspecified. It could be scripture, a legal code or a ledger, and each reading fits, because all three are books that tell people their place. "Bound" does double work as well, meaning both a physical binding and a restriction. It also sounds a quiet echo of "ground," two lines earlier, which gives the poem its closest thing to a rhyme. Ground is what the singers build, and bound is what the book does, so the two words pull against each other.

That one echo is nearly all the music the poem has on the surface. There is no end rhyme and no punctuation, and the only capital letter belongs to "God." The lines read as one sentence that never quite finishes. The two "without" phrases dangle, free to attach to the hands, to the liberty or to the fear itself. That ambiguity lets the poem model what it describes, because it has no full stops of its own to hold it in place. The short, even lines, grouped in couplets, feel like items on a form, which suits the title. The poem borrows the dry look of an official report and uses it to carry a very different kind of knowledge.

What makes the poem worth reading is how much it does without ever raising its voice. It contains no slogan, no villain's name and no argument. It sets the cold phrase "risk assessment" beside an image of working people singing, and lets the reader feel the mismatch. If the rich fear this, the poem implies, then what they fear is not chaos but the loss of their role as the ones who define order. In six lines, Bonta shows how the vocabulary of safety can disguise the defense of privilege.

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