Self-harm — Poem analysis

and we in other news have voted to suffer

they who believe in the sun too long are ash

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The title does a lot of the work. "Self-harm" is a word we normally attach to one person's private pain, and Dave Bonta hangs it over five lines that are about a crowd. Once you know that, the first line stops sounding like a report and starts sounding like a diagnosis: "and we in other news / have voted to suffer."

The opening is built from borrowed speech. "In other news" is the stock phrase a broadcaster uses to turn from one story to the next, and the poem grammatically swallows it. The "we" are not watching the news but have become an item in it, and the word "other" makes them one more headline in the scroll, with no more weight than the story before or after. The poem begins with a lowercase "and," as though we have dropped into a bulletin already under way, and it never gives its own context. It names no election, no country, no year. That vagueness works in its favor, because any reader who has watched a public decision go badly can supply their own example.

The central irony sits in the verb. People vote *for* things, such as a candidate, a policy, or a change. Here the object of the vote is "to suffer," as if misery were itself on the ballot. The poem doesn't say the voters were tricked, and the sentence leaves no one else to blame. The perfect tense, "have voted," makes it sound finished, a result already announced. Democracy's best tool becomes the instrument of the harm, which is exactly what the title promised.

Then the poem turns, and the pronoun turns with it. "We" becomes "they": "they who believe / in the sun too long / are ash." The register also changes, from the flat chatter of the news to something closer to a proverb or a line of scripture. "They who" is an old, solemn construction, and it sounds like a warning handed down rather than a sentence spoken in a studio.

The image is a compressed one. The sun is the most ordinary symbol of life and light, so "believe in the sun" suggests faith in something that seems obviously good, such as progress, warmth, or a promised bright future. But the poem undercuts it in two ways. "Too long" could modify the believing, meaning they held on to their faith past the point where it was sane. It could equally modify the exposure, meaning they stood in the light until it burned them. The line break encourages both readings, since "they who believe" can stand briefly as a complete thought before "in the sun" arrives. The poem seems to suggest that the danger is not darkness but a bright thing trusted without limit. "Ash" is the end of that process, and it is also the leftover of burning, which echoes the physical meaning of self-harm.

The shift from "we" to "they" is the poem's most interesting uncertainty. Perhaps the believers are a subset of the "we," or perhaps the speaker has stepped back to watch the group from the outside, as one watches a news story. It may also be that "we" are the ones who voted and "they" are what we become. The poem leaves the gap open, and the unease comes partly from that distance between the two pronouns.

Formally, the poem is free verse with no rhyme, no punctuation, and no capital letters. The lines are short, and the stresses pile up toward the end: "sun too long" is three heavy monosyllables in a row, slowing the line until "are ash" drops in like a full stop that the poem declines to print. Sound ties the two stanzas together quietly. "Suffer," "sun," and "ash" share a hissing *s*/*sh* quality, so the word that opens the harm and the word that closes it feel related by breath as well as by meaning.

What makes the poem worth reading is how little it spends. In about twenty words it joins the vocabulary of journalism, voting, faith, and fire, and lets the reader notice what they have in common. It doesn't lecture or name a villain. It simply sets a plain headline beside an ancient-sounding warning and leaves us to decide which of the two we are standing in.

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