TRIPTYCH IN NOIR — Summary

her jailed lover’s image in the mirror slowly loses color like tea poured again & again from the same leaves or a cloud of cigarette smoke mixing with the air

beneath the mirror’s mercury lies the captain lost at sea in some interminable corrido his waterproof watch still ticks inside his slicker

it’s past 3:00 light from the street lamp filters through the slats of the blind outshines the moon: two sets of stripes that cross at an oblique angle on the walls & the bed where she lies staring into the one dark corner

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A woman lies awake after 3:00 a.m., thinking about a lover who is in jail. The poem never states her feelings outright. Instead it lets images carry them. His reflection in the mirror fades like weak tea made from the same leaves again and again, or like smoke dissolving into the air. Memory, it suggests, thins out the longer someone is gone.

The middle section drifts somewhere stranger: a ship's captain lost at sea, caught in an endless ballad, his watch still ticking. It reads like a dreamlike double for the absent man, someone out of reach while time keeps passing.

The last section returns to the bedroom. Streetlight through the blinds throws crossing stripes on the walls and bed, a pattern that echoes prison bars. She stares into the one dark corner. The mood is quiet, lonely, and a little ghostly, like a scene from a film noir, with the sense of being trapped alongside the person she misses.

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