Haiku for a day in January — Summary

Dave BontaContemplative

I wake at 4:00 but my right thumb keeps twitching as if in its own dream.

On the plowed driveway’s hard-packed snow, three dark cigars: Coyote was here.

Winter palimpsest: inside each white-tailed deer track, a coyote print.

Rabbit tracks go into the laurel thicket & don’t come out.

A rubbing sound on the underside of the floor as something turns over.

Hurtling down the hill while seated on a sled — I feel so sedate.

“Transparency.” “The rule of law.” Never before have I wept at such dull words.

Nothing has disturbed the snow on the old statue of a setter at point.

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Dave Bonta strings together eight small snapshots of a single winter day, and most of them come from close attention to the outdoors. The speaker wakes early with a twitching thumb, then notices coyote droppings on a snowy driveway, a coyote print inside a deer track, and rabbit tracks that vanish into a thicket. Even the sound of something turning over beneath the floor suggests an animal sharing the house. Nature here is always half-seen, known by what it leaves behind.

Then the tone shifts. The sledding haiku is lightly funny, since the speed feels oddly calm. But the seventh stanza turns serious: the speaker weeps at words like "transparency" and "the rule of law," which suggests a worry about public life, though the poem never says why. The last image, snow undisturbed on a statue of a setter at point, feels still and watchful. Overall the mood is quiet, curious, and a little uneasy.

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