Stenographer to the powerful — Poem analysis

Dave BontaCheerful

he who will conform will get bled will get clear ink

I would advise him to love the beautifulest hands not the pen

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Six lines are enough for Dave Bonta to stage a small tragedy of complicity. The title, «Stenographer to the powerful», supplies the situation: a person whose job is to take down other people's words and never add his own. The poem then gives that figure a warning and a piece of advice. The warning is that obedience costs more than it pays. The advice is to place your loyalty in the living human body and not in the tool that serves power.

The first stanza is built on a proverb-like opening, "he who will conform", the sort of phrase that usually introduces a moral. Bonta then turns the proverb into a threat. Twice the verb phrase "will get" arrives, first with "bled", then with "clear ink". Both times the subject is passive, a man things happen to. The repetition feels like a ledger, with the conformist's rewards listed in a flat, bureaucratic voice. Almost every word is a single syllable, so the lines move in short, hard steps, and "conform" is the only word that stretches beyond one beat.

The imagery is where the stanza gets strange. To be "bled" suggests old medicine, in which a patient was drained in the name of a cure, but it also suggests a pen leaking and a printed page where ink bleeds through. The next line seems to complete the exchange: the conformist loses blood and receives "clear ink" in its place. A body is turned into an instrument. "Clear" is a deliberately slippery word. Clear ink might be transparent and so leave no mark, which would mean this man's labour will never be traced to him. It might be clean, uncontroversial language that offends nobody. Or it might echo the idiom "in the clear", the safety granted to someone who has done what he was told. In each reading the cost is a loss of colour, as if red blood becomes colourless text.

The second stanza shifts from prophecy to a first-person voice: "I would advise him to love". The tone is quiet and almost courteous, and the conditional "would" makes it a suggestion rather than a command. That mildness contrasts with the menace of the first stanza and makes the advice more unsettling. The line break matters too. "To love" hangs at the end of the line, and for a moment the sentence could go anywhere. It lands on "the beautifulest hands", then pivots sharply on "not the pen".

"Beautifulest" is the most important word in the poem. It is ungrammatical by standard rules, since "most beautiful" is the correct form, and it is also the longest word in the text, four syllables in a poem otherwise made of clipped ones. That slightly childlike, overflowing superlative is a small act of nonconformity. The poem breaks the rule at exactly the moment it recommends breaking away from the safe, approved language that the conformist receives as ink. The word sounds loving and a little clumsy, as though tenderness has outgrown the available grammar.

The hands and the pen set up the poem's central contrast. A pen is an instrument that records whatever it is made to record. Hands can write, but they can also hold, work, refuse, and touch. The poem leaves open whose hands these are: the stenographer's own, the hands of the people he writes about, or hands in general as a figure for human presence. That openness is useful, because the instruction still holds. Love what is alive and capable of choice, not the apparatus that lets you disappear into your task. There is also a wry self-awareness here, since a poem, written with pens or their descendants, warns against loving the pen.

There is no rhyme and no regular metre. The poem works through repetition, contrast between short words and one long one, and a deliberate shift of address from "he" to "I" and "him". It is significant because it is compact and moral without sounding preachy. In a few lines it describes how a person can be emptied by serving authority, and it suggests that even small deviations, such as a broken word or a loving choice, are a way of staying human. Anyone who has ever copied down what they were told to say can recognise the stenographer in it.

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