IN THE ATTIC — Poem analysis

Always, while you slept, we crept from our painted beds and pattered through the quiet house, trailing the hems of our nightgowns and annoying the watchful cats.

Now we sleep in a box in the attic, the delicate among us wrapped in paper. The door is locked and we do not have a key.

When the cold room is lightened by the moon, we sit on a broken cot to read old letters we’ve mined from Grandma’s trunk.

Sometimes we listen at the door and hear your solemn murmurings, but we do not comprehend that far-off tongue.

We long for your hands and eyes, for stories and buggy rides, for cambric tea on summer afternoons.

We ponder the photographs of little girls and the brother with his hammer. We recall how Grandma sewed our dresses and coats with buttons and lace, with careful, even seams.

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The word "doll" never appears, yet by the second stanza it is hard to doubt who is speaking. The voices have "painted beds" and nightgowns with hems to trail, and "the delicate among us" are "wrapped in paper" inside a box. Judging by this imagery, they are childhood playthings, and the "you" they address is the child who once owned them. The poem sets that child's waking life against the toys' secret night life, and gradually shows how far apart the two have drifted.

The poem is built on a hinge between "Always" and "Now." The first stanza is a small comedy of mischief. The toys creep out of bed while the child sleeps, patter through the house, and annoy "the watchful cats." The line "and pattered" stands alone, short and light, like the sound of tiny feet. After that the energy drains away. The second stanza opens with "Now," and the freedom of the house shrinks to a box, a cold room and a locked door. The toys can wander at night but cannot turn a key, so their magic turns out to be small and domestic. The stanza ends on plain monosyllables: "The door is locked / and we do not have a key." The flat, blunt phrasing makes the helplessness land harder than any complaint would.

There is no rhyme and no regular meter. The short lines follow ordinary speech, and the missing rhyme suits a poem about things that no longer fit together neatly. Nothing clicks shut at the end of a stanza. The sentences just stop, much as the toys' old routines have stopped.

The attic scenes are quietly inventive. Moonlight "lightens" the cold room, a gentler verb than "lights," as if the dark were only thinned. The toys sit on a "broken cot" and read letters they have "mined" from Grandma's trunk. Mining suggests digging for ore, and it shows how little they have: scraps of paper are the only treasure in their world. They also listen at the door and hear "solemn murmurings" in a "far-off tongue" they cannot "comprehend." The distance here isn't physical, since the voices are only on the other side of a door. The grown-up language has simply become foreign to them. The formal word "comprehend" also sits oddly in a toy's mouth, as if they have borrowed vocabulary from the same letters they read.

The fourth stanza turns from what they have to what they miss: "your hands and eyes." They long to be touched and looked at, and the list that follows is homely: "stories and buggy rides, / for cambric tea / on summer afternoons." Cambric tea is a mild children's drink, mostly hot milk and water with a little tea, and the word is also the name of a fine linen cloth. Whether or not the poet intended it, that pairs neatly with the sewing in the last stanza. The buggy rides seem to reach back to a slower, older world. The poem gives no date, so the details matter more as texture than as history.

The ending is where the poem quietly gathers its strength. The toys "ponder the photographs / of little girls / and the brother with his hammer." The hammer is a vivid glimpse of a whole family, a boy caught mid-project, so the box in the attic becomes a small archive of people. Then the last memory is of Grandma, who "sewed / our dresses and coats / with buttons and lace, / with careful, even seams." The poem ends on seams, the things that hold cloth together, and on the care that went into making the toys. After so much about broken, locked and wrapped-away things, this is the one image of wholeness, and it is a memory of being made with love.

That restraint is what makes the poem significant. It never scolds the grown-up child, and it never says the toys are sad. It lets plain details carry the feeling: the missing key, the unreadable voices, the careful stitching. It makes childhood's end felt from the side of the things left behind, and it suggests that objects can hold a family's affection long after the people have moved on. A reader who has ever packed away a favourite toy may well feel a small, unexpected pang.

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