Unspoken — Poem analysis

ZeHavockboyRomantic

I am yours Are you mine? Would you like to dance this night with me? Long awaited day My hopes not in vain But I know I cant be With one so pretty Kisses are the words of love that remain unspoken But what are words that are said To one who cannot be explained By such words of beauty Remember me Or forget I'll remember you This is with all sincerity

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Few love poems begin as bluntly as "I am yours / Are you mine?" The speaker hands over everything in four words and then asks for something back. That imbalance, a complete giving paired with an uncertain return, drives the whole poem. It is about wanting to be close to someone and being unsure whether that closeness is possible, or whether language can carry the feeling at all.

The poem moves through four stages. First comes the offer and the question. Then comes the invitation, "Would you like to dance this night with me?", the longest and most conversational line so far, almost spoken aloud. Next is a flicker of optimism, "Long awaited day / My hopes not in vain", which a single word undercuts: "But I know I cant be / With one so pretty." The poem never says why the speaker can't be with this person. Judging by the wording, it could be self-doubt, since "so pretty" sounds like someone placing the beloved out of reach, but the text leaves the reason open. That silence suits a poem called "Unspoken."

The title is also the poem's central paradox. "Kisses are the words of love that remain unspoken" turns a kiss into a kind of language, the one that says what speech cannot. Yet the speaker is using speech, and the next lines admit the problem: "But what are words that are said / To one who cannot be explained / By such words of beauty." The beloved exceeds description, and the speaker knows it. So the poem is a stand-in for a kiss that hasn't happened, words offered by someone who doubts them.

The form matches this restraint. There is no regular rhyme scheme or fixed rhythm. The lines are short and uneven, some only two or three words, like "Or forget." Full stops are absent, so the poem has the hesitant feel of someone speaking and stopping, then starting again. Sound still ties it together quietly. The long "a" in "vain," "remain" and "explained" links the hope, the silence and the failure of explanation. The "ee" sound runs through "me," "be," "pretty" and "me" again in "Remember me." Those are the words where the speaker is most exposed, so the repetition has the effect of a refrain. The imagery is spare, with just a dance and kisses, and neither is carried out. Both stay at the edge of happening.

The ending is the most interesting part. After all the doubt, the speaker gives the beloved complete freedom: "Remember me / Or forget." The tone is gentle and makes no demand. Then comes the one certainty in the poem, "I'll remember you." The question marks of the opening have gone, and what remains is a promise the speaker can keep alone, whatever the other person does. The final line, "This is with all sincerity," sounds like the close of a letter, and it echoes "I am yours" from the start. The poem opens by giving the self away and closes by signing off on that gift. The plain, slightly formal phrase also suggests the speaker is wary of sounding insincere, as if the earlier talk of beauty and kisses might be mistaken for flattery.

Part of the poem's interest is that it doesn't dress up its feelings. It gives no reasons, no elaborate metaphors and no resolution. Its small flaws, like the missing apostrophe in "cant," add to a sense of something written quickly and sincerely, though that is a matter of impression. The poem shows a quiet kind of love in which hoping and giving up sit side by side. It is also honest about the limits of its medium: the best it can do is admit that words fall short and promise to remember anyway.

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