Criticism — Summary

I woke up to the first snowfall of this winter.

A thin line of snow blanketed the coiled razor wire atop the galvanized chain link fence.

A thin white line which divided the ground from the sky, the underbrush from the leafless trees, the no longer lush green lawn from this no longer clear blue sky.

This snow hazy day locked up alone to sit with nothing on my mind after my cell-mate, pulled off to court, left the never silent all the more silent, and even though everyone in here bears the burden of their own crimes, my mother's last letter hurt more than the gallows when she said:

"Not only should you be ashamed of yourself, you're not really being punished because you have a roof over your heads, a warm bed and three meals a day, a change of clothes and a radio."

Her criticism, frozen like the snow, biting like this frost, silence in volumes, melted somewhat by the last words of her eloquent, caring last letter,

"Have you made any new friends?"

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The speaker is in prison, watching the first snow of winter settle along the razor wire on top of the fence. That thin white line seems to divide everything: ground from sky, lawn from trees, green from blue. With his cell-mate gone to court, the usually noisy place feels even emptier, and he is left alone with his thoughts.

Those thoughts turn to his mother's latest letter. She scolds him, saying he should be ashamed and isn't really being punished since he has a roof, a bed, meals, clothes and a radio. He says this hurt more than the gallows would have. Her words are cold, like the snow and frost around him. Yet her letter ends with a simple question, "Have you made any new friends?" That small, caring line softens the blow. The mood is quiet, lonely and wintry, but a little warmth gets through at the end, showing that her concern for him hasn't gone away.

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