eclipse — Summary

gwyn.Romantic

the sun, the moon, the stars, the earth move in eternal harmony

someone said that when the sun is closer to the moon than the earth there's a solar eclipse or when the moon is in earth's shadow there's a lunar eclipse

and maybe if theres one day that the sun is between the moon and earth the world would descend into chaos and nothing would be of its billion years of existence

but what if i told you that you're like my sun and i'm the earth you're messing with my feelings

i long to see those eclipses am i just a toy to you because i always feel like my world's chaotic without you and you don't actually care?

maybe it's better if i don't see you again would it be? if our relationship faded into nothingness because i know i deserve those eclipses and if you can't give them to me then maybe you're toxic and i should leave you after all.

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Gwyn's "eclipse" starts out sounding like a science lesson, with the sun, moon, stars and earth moving in perfect harmony. Then it turns personal. The speaker uses the idea of an eclipse, where bodies line up and light is blocked, to describe a painful relationship. The other person is the sun, and the speaker is the earth, circling someone who may not be giving anything back.

The feelings are tangled. There is longing, since the speaker wants those rare, dramatic alignments, and there is hurt, shown in the question "am i just a toy to you." Without this person, the speaker's world feels chaotic. By the end, though, the tone shifts toward resolve. The speaker says they deserve those eclipses, and if they can't have them, the word "toxic" and the thought of leaving appear.

The mood is wistful, anxious and quietly brave. The speaker still sounds unsure, asking "would it be?" even while deciding to walk away.

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