SIX WORDS, SIX STANZAS — Poem analysis

Mary F. C. PrattContemplative

The steamer trunk might have been my grandfather’s, but I don’t remember seeing it in his dark little room that smelled like old clocks.

If I sit for a long time in this chair the right words will appear. Like magic. Despite the evidence, I still believe

that. Believing in anything now takes a toll. There doesn’t seem to be a god, for instance, who gives a shit about us.

It’s August. The dawn chorus is over for the year. Sometimes, one dusty robin lands on the lawn and hops around. The worms

have burrowed down under. Everyone is exhausted by the heat, the drought, the plague, waiting and waiting for some kind of relief.

My grandfather had a small life, and yet he made himself a bit of joy. Magic tricks. Walks. Old friends. Keeping all those clocks ticking.

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Poems about waiting for inspiration usually end with a sudden rescue. Mary F. C. Pratt's "Six Words, Six Stanzas" does something quieter and more convincing. Its speaker sits in a chair, hoping "the right words will appear. Like magic." The answer, when it comes, is not a flash of genius but a memory of a grandfather who had "a small life" and still "made himself a bit of joy." The central idea is that when faith in big things drains away, modest, practised pleasures can keep a person going, and remembering them may be the only magic on offer.

The form matches that modesty. There are six stanzas of three lines each, so the title's count is literally true, though the poem never says which six words it means and leaves the reader to wonder. There is no rhyme and no fixed metre. The lines run to about ten or eleven syllables and move like speech, with sentences spilling over line endings and stanza breaks. Those breaks do real work. "Despite the evidence, I still believe" closes a stanza, and the word it was reaching for, "that," arrives alone at the top of the next, as if belief needs a moment's nerve. Later, "The worms" ends the fourth stanza and "have burrowed down under" begins the fifth, so the worms slip into the gap on the page before the sentence admits they are gone.

The imagery moves between two dry, worn places. The first is the grandfather's "dark little room that smelled like old clocks," a memory built from smell and sound. Even the steamer trunk is hedged: it "might have been" his, and the speaker doesn't remember seeing it there. The second is the August lawn, where "the dawn chorus is over / for the year" and a single "dusty robin" hops about. Dust links the two scenes, and the robin, a bird we tend to expect in brighter seasons, looks like a leftover. When the poem widens to "Everyone," it lists "the heat, the drought, the plague" without saying what it refers to. The effect is of public weariness, with the speaker's private creative block sitting inside it. The phrase "waiting and waiting for some kind of relief" drags on with its repetition, and "some kind of" admits that nobody can say what relief would look like.

The tone is just as carefully judged. After the delicate memory of the trunk and the clocks, the third stanza turns blunt: there doesn't seem to be a god "who gives a shit about us." The casual "for instance" and the swearing make the despair sound like something said aloud rather than staged, and "takes / a toll" treats belief as something that costs more each year. Because the voice is so unshowy, the reader trusts it when it finally turns.

That turn comes with "and yet." The last stanza trades long, hesitant sentences for fragments: "Magic tricks. Walks. Old friends." These are plain nouns with no decoration, small enough to count on one hand. The word "magic" has also changed. At first it was a wish for words to arrive without effort. Now it is the grandfather's actual conjuring, a human trick performed for pleasure. The clocks return too, but where they once only gave off a smell, he is now "keeping all those clocks ticking." That is a verb of care, and it suggests that time is kept going by patient effort rather than by miracle. The poem ends on "ticking," a small sound after the silence of the finished dawn chorus.

The poem is significant because it refuses both easy comfort and easy gloom. It doesn't repair the world or answer the question about God. It offers a scaled-down faith in attention, habit and friendship, and it shows that faith working. The speaker waited for the right words, and what arrived was a grandfather. The poem on the page is the evidence that the waiting was not wasted.

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